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Yes, I seen the house burn,
Yes, I saw the flames blister without care,
Yes, I knew people were inside,
Yes, I heard their screams and cries,
Yes, I walked within,
I mean.. why wouldn't I ?

Yes, I felt the heat that almost pierced my skin,
Yes, I strolled through each room seeing the unidentified, detached bodies,
in their remarkable sins,
Yes, I left without a care,
Yes, I the one who saw and witnessed this,

The one who had the matches,
The one who stroke and heard it clap against the pack,
The one who gently threw it upon,
The one who wanted them to pay,
The one who was determined to feel at ease and erase,
all memories of that day,

I looked back at that burned house with a fresh smirk pressed on my face,
I hear a slight whisper saying,
" Well done, They deserved it",
I turned and walked away,
Yes, I seen the house burn,
and if anyone asks,
Yes, I was there
I'm really proud of this piece, and I just hope you like it :)
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:iconcyclist74:
cyclist74 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
i just hope this is fiction?
other wise, i have to tell the police!
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
LOL yes it if fiction xD
and you'd rat me out >.> *pulls out match* >.<
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:iconcyclist74:
cyclist74 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
u got game, i like that.
keep up the wrinting!
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:iconzinkai1:
zinkai1 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011
well, thank you ^o^
and I sure will ._.
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Dreamgifter Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. I feel the fire and see the house. Great imagery! :+favlove:
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
Thanks ^^ you're so nice
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:icondreamgifter:
Dreamgifter Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: You're very welcome!
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
haha ^^
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010   Writer
I agree with a previous comment - the grammar isn't 100% in this...however...that doesn't mean it isn't a great poem.
It is full of emotions; mainly what seems to be anger and hurt. Yet it doesn't broadcast that and kill the reader with emotions they don't want to see or understand.

Great work.

:fish:
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:iconzinkai1:
zinkai1 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010
Thanks!! and yeah the way I wrote... its suppose to be that way.
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