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Yes, I seen the house burn,
Yes, I saw the flames blister without care,
Yes, I knew people were inside,
Yes, I heard their screams and cries,
Yes, I walked within,
I mean.. why wouldn't I ?

Yes, I felt the heat that almost pierced my skin,
Yes, I strolled through each room seeing the unidentified, detached bodies,
in their remarkable sins,
Yes, I left without a care,
Yes, I the one who saw and witnessed this,

The one who had the matches,
The one who stroke and heard it clap against the pack,
The one who gently threw it upon,
The one who wanted them to pay,
The one who was determined to feel at ease and erase,
all memories of that day,

I looked back at that burned house with a fresh smirk pressed on my face,
I hear a slight whisper saying,
" Well done, They deserved it",
I turned and walked away,
Yes, I seen the house burn,
and if anyone asks,
Yes, I was there
I'm really proud of this piece, and I just hope you like it :)
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:iconcyclist74:
cyclist74 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
i just hope this is fiction?
other wise, i have to tell the police!
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
LOL yes it if fiction xD
and you'd rat me out >.> *pulls out match* >.<
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cyclist74 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
u got game, i like that.
keep up the wrinting!
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011
well, thank you ^o^
and I sure will ._.
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Dreamgifter Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. I feel the fire and see the house. Great imagery! :+favlove:
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
Thanks ^^ you're so nice
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Dreamgifter Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: You're very welcome!
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
haha ^^
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010   Writer
I agree with a previous comment - the grammar isn't 100% in this...however...that doesn't mean it isn't a great poem.
It is full of emotions; mainly what seems to be anger and hurt. Yet it doesn't broadcast that and kill the reader with emotions they don't want to see or understand.

Great work.

:fish:
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:iconzinkai1:
zinkai1 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010
Thanks!! and yeah the way I wrote... its suppose to be that way.
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010   Writer
Np :)
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starisis9 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Wow.. there is alot of uh anger or somjething going on here. Unless I'm missing something
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:iconzinkai1:
zinkai1 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
XD at that yime I was a little down but ni not really.
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:iconstarisis9:
starisis9 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Oh o i c. Ok had me worried for a second. lol
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:iconzinkai1:
zinkai1 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
lol i'm glad that you cared :)
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starisis9 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
Of course ^_^
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sophhpos Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010  Student Writer
Especially love the last verse! =D
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010
Thank You for your kind words
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sophhpos Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010  Student Writer
Ah no problem!
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010
C:
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Pingk-NC Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thats awesome, I love that!
Just a couple of things, the first line should be I >saw< the house burn. I >seen< isn't grammatically correct.
Same reason, Yes, >I< the one who saw and witnessed this should be Yes, >I'm< the one...

Awesome nonetheless though :)
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zinkai1 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2010
Well thank you ^_^ i'm glad you liked it
and yeah, the ending was suppose ti be that way but thanks again.
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